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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #240 on: August 23, 2019, 09:51 am »
his idea was for YOU, DUCK, to write a short story, and all the contestants were to think of a great title for your story to be named.

Yeah, I know, I just got confused. But it is all good now. I will do that next.

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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #241 on: August 23, 2019, 10:15 am »
Yeah, I know, I just got confused. But it is all good now. I will do that next.

Also, nice story!
thanks.
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #242 on: August 23, 2019, 10:24 am »
Alpine Store
There was this geeky dinosaur called Farty McFarterpants. This stupid dinosaur you could withstand earthquakes but was ridiculously scared of co ck ro aches. One day he was walking, he was whistling the teletubbies theme in his lips. Then he didn't notice where he was going and suddenly smahed his head into this wall that was made of some substance mixing mango jam along with sticky concrete. Being as bad as he is, he tried to eat the wall only to break his teeth. He went on bleeding and found a shop. That store was called Alpine Store. He went in and suddenly he was teleported to some mountain. He screamed "What the fudge!!! I hate you idiots who try to call my avatar stupid! And now you people have trapped me in such idiotic mountains?? BRAH"". Then he noticed suddenly he was still bleeding. He put his face into a pit of ice and he got frozen. When he got unfroze, he found himself almost killed by coc kroaches. He ran screaming and fell into a pit of lava. The End.
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #243 on: August 23, 2019, 10:26 am »
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Although I am glad you participated, I am not sure how much Master will like that...

Welp! Seeing as how you and Wordi are the only two active anymore, I will quickly reread each, and i will announce the winner now!
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #244 on: August 23, 2019, 10:29 am »
He's sensitive, but I felt like he was right for this story. But that's because of already existing memes others made of him.  :(

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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #245 on: August 23, 2019, 10:32 am »
@rocko.... Why'd you have to mention that it was master? That did seem like a direct insult imo. You could have just named him a regular name like Matthew and you would be the only one knowing of the inside joke.
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #246 on: August 23, 2019, 10:33 am »
Check now Mhm

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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #247 on: August 23, 2019, 10:33 am »
Sorry, Epico. :'(
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #248 on: August 23, 2019, 10:35 am »
....better.

Really? Seems disgusting.

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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #249 on: August 23, 2019, 10:40 am »
Really? Seems disgusting.

It is better then to directly insult someone though.













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Anyways, I think Wordi wins the story, based on her creativity. Good job!

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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #250 on: August 23, 2019, 10:55 am »
Here is the story, winner gets 1 win, and 450 points:

One day Fred was going for a walk when he saw that he was going in the wrong direction. He turned around to see that there was a wormhole behind him, and he got really frightened. Realizing that this was not an everyday occurrence, he went closer to it to see if he could analyse what was happening. When he stepped closer, he was immediately sucked into the wormhole, which teleported him to France during World War 2. He had barely caught his breath when a Gestapo officer came up to him and asked him what he was doing. Fred did not want to raised suspicions, so he replied saying he was looking for food. The officer then grabbed him and told him that he was not going to eat until he had been put back on the Russian front...
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #251 on: August 23, 2019, 01:24 pm »
One day Fred was going for a walk when he saw that he was going in the wrong direction. He turned around to see that there was a wormhole behind him, and he got really frightened. Realizing that this was not an everyday occurrence, he went closer to it to see if he could analyse what was happening. When he stepped closer, he was immediately sucked into the wormhole, which teleported him to France during World War 2. He had barely caught his breath when a Gestapo officer came up to him and asked him what he was doing. Fred did not want to raised suspicions, so he replied saying he was looking for food. The officer then grabbed him and told him that he was not going to eat until he had been put back on the Russian front...
Wormholes of War! (rated PG-13 now playing)
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #252 on: August 23, 2019, 11:23 pm »
Nice!
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #253 on: August 25, 2019, 01:21 am »
I don't see wordigirl having more creativity but clearly hers was better when it comes to word use, grammar and sentence structuring.

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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #254 on: August 25, 2019, 01:22 am »
The Mysterious Time-Travelling Wormhole

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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #255 on: August 25, 2019, 06:57 am »
I don't see wordigirl having more creativity but clearly hers was better when it comes to word use, grammar and sentence structuring.
.... just a question....

What do you consider "creativity"?
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #256 on: August 25, 2019, 01:11 pm »
.... just a question....

What do you consider "creativity"?

I do not know about Rocky, but I see it as using what Wordi could think of herself, without references to anyone, and creating something original form that. Rocky's seemed to have some bitterness towards Master when it was addressed as him, thus it seemed to not be original.










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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #257 on: August 25, 2019, 04:23 pm »
I do not know about Rocky, but I see it as using what Wordi could think of herself, without references to anyone, and creating something original form that. Rocky's seemed to have some bitterness towards Master when it was addressed as him, thus it seemed to not be original.










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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #258 on: August 27, 2019, 02:32 am »
.... just a question....

What do you consider "creativity"?

Yours sounded like a normal awesome story but mine including cheeky things that are so unreal that couldn't happen at all.

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« Reply #259 on: August 27, 2019, 09:03 am »
Yours sounded like a normal awesome story but mine including cheeky things that are so unreal that couldn't happen at all.
...that doesn't mean either one had more "creativity". Being creative is just using your imagination. I figure that duck was pleased with the mystical direction my story was headed in, but yours was just really random and it had no structure in my opinion.
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #260 on: August 27, 2019, 09:07 am »
and it had no structure in my opinion.

You know thats the whole point of the story right

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« Reply #261 on: August 27, 2019, 09:19 am »
I'll give an honest un-biased review of what I mean:
Alpine StoreThere was this geeky dinosaur called Farty McFarterpants. This stupid dinosaur you could withstand earthquakes but was ridiculously scared of co ck ro aches.
You used an opinion about the fact that he was "stupid" randomly. If you wanted them to know his personality, I think you should have said something like "he wasn't too smart," or "Farty was not that bright". Also, you mentioned that he could "withstand earthquakes", but no earthquakes even occured in the actual story


One day he was walking, he was whistling the teletubbies theme in his lips. Then he didn't notice where he was going and suddenly smahed his head into this wall that was made of some substance mixing mango jam along with sticky concrete.
I admit the teletubbies song was silly and unexpected, but then, you didn't explain where the wall came from, or even why it was made out of cement AND edible sweets. Who would build that wall?

Being as bad as he is, he tried to eat the wall only to break his teeth. He went on bleeding and found a shop. That store was called Alpine Store. He went in and suddenly he was teleported to some mountain. He screamed "What the fudge!!! I hate you idiots who try to call my avatar stupid! And now you people have trapped me in such idiotic mountains?? BRAH"".
There was no indication of who created the "Alpine Shop", so how did Farty know that they intentionally trapped him in the mountains.

Then he noticed suddenly he was still bleeding. He put his face into a pit of ice and he got frozen. When he got unfroze, he found himself almost killed by coc kroaches. He ran screaming and fell into a pit of lava. The End.
....how was ice and lava so near? You didn't fully explain the scene of these odd mountains. Also, you didn't explain where the roaches even came from.
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #262 on: August 27, 2019, 09:20 am »
sorry. I don't know why it made the text so small
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #263 on: August 27, 2019, 09:22 am »
You know thats the whole point of the story right

.....I'm just letting you know that's probably the reason you didn't win. It's hard to follow a story with no structure. Even odd wacky stories like Alice and Wonderland need to have enough structure to follow although the events are sometimes random and weird.
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« Reply #264 on: August 27, 2019, 09:25 am »
...plus, who is the "THEY" that trapped him in the mountains? You provided absolutely no backstory. You could have said something in the beginning like:
There was this geeky dinosaur called Farty McFarterpants. This stupid dinosaur you could withstand earthquakes but was ridiculously scared of co ck ro aches. Everyone made fun of him, and they wanted to trap him in the mountains.


or something
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #265 on: August 27, 2019, 10:46 am »
I don't think you understand. The whole point of the story is to be geeky unexpected and unreal. Lava in snow mountains is an example. I want it to be imaginary and creative, not very touching to real life. Also the cement and mango jam also was just creativity, It cannot happen in reality but its very cheeky and co cky so I used it.   ^-^

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« Reply #266 on: August 27, 2019, 12:20 pm »
I don't think you understand. The whole point of the story is to be geeky unexpected and unreal. Lava in snow mountains is an example. I want it to be imaginary and creative, not very touching to real life. Also the cement and mango jam also was just creativity, It cannot happen in reality but its very cheeky and co cky so I used it.   ^-^
I understand where you're going, but I think you needed to tie it together a little better. That was quite choppy.
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #267 on: August 27, 2019, 12:47 pm »
I understand where you're going, but I think you needed to tie it together a little better. That was quite choppy.

Whaddya mean by choppy?
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Re: House League of Society
« Reply #268 on: August 27, 2019, 01:17 pm »
Let me rewrite the story to show you.

There once was a dinosaur named Farty McFarterpants. He was very big and strong, but for some reason, he was terribly afraid of cckroaches. He was also not very smart. Many of the "cool kids" made fun of him, and wanted to trap him in the mountains.
One day, he took a walk while whistling the teletubbies theme song. He was so distracted, he didn't notice that he had entered the wacky forest. Suddenly, he smashed his head into a wall made of mango jam and sticky concrete. A not-so-bright idea came to mind. He tried to eat the wall, but it only broke his teeth. Bleeding, he continued on and found a shop called "Alpine Store". Curious, he went through the door. Suddenly, he was teleported to a strange mountain. "What the fudge!!!" He screamed, "The 'cool kids' must have finally found a way to trick me." He looked around in dismay. "I hate you idiots who call me stupid! And now you people have trapped me in such idiotic mountains?? BRAH."
As he yelled, he noticed that blood was still leaking from his mouth. Unfortunately, he wasn't very experienced in first aid skills. He put his face into a nearby pit of ice which instantly froze him solid. By the time the ice defrosted and he came to, he found himself covered in cckroaches. He ran screaming so loud that he didn't notice the pit of lava right before him. "NO!" he screamed as he fell into it. The End.
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« Reply #269 on: August 27, 2019, 01:18 pm »
And that's still not the best story, but that's a little less choppy.
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