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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #31 on: June 12, 2013, 03:57 pm »
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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #35 on: June 13, 2013, 11:51 am »
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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #36 on: June 13, 2013, 01:14 pm »
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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #37 on: June 13, 2013, 01:25 pm »
Could a recruiter accept/deny this application please.
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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #38 on: June 13, 2013, 01:26 pm »
Could a recruiter accept this application please.
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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #39 on: June 13, 2013, 01:29 pm »
Someone, PLEASE ACCEPT OR DENY THIS. :(

It's very hard to wait.
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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #40 on: June 13, 2013, 01:30 pm »
Someone, PLEASE ACCEPT THIS. :(

It's very hard to wait.
Unless you're patient,
which I'm not
so yeah...


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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #41 on: June 13, 2013, 04:40 pm »
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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #42 on: June 13, 2013, 10:36 pm »
Bump I hope you get reviewer!  8)


 

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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #43 on: June 14, 2013, 01:32 am »
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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #44 on: June 14, 2013, 03:48 am »
Dude, you deserved Reviewer one month ago. I honestly don't get it; why didn't you get accepted? You have the material.

Good luck bro.
 

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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #45 on: June 14, 2013, 01:05 pm »
Dude, you deserved Reviewer one month ago. I honestly don't get it; why didn't you get accepted? You have the material.

Good luck bro.
Thanks bro, I hope I get it on this one.


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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #46 on: June 14, 2013, 04:56 pm »
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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #48 on: June 15, 2013, 11:54 am »
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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #50 on: June 15, 2013, 06:26 pm »
Accept this somebody cmon its not that hard.  :)
 

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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #52 on: June 16, 2013, 07:44 am »
Bump for mat


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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #53 on: June 16, 2013, 07:48 am »
Mat, them, check this THREAD NOW!

 

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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #54 on: June 17, 2013, 01:47 pm »
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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #55 on: June 17, 2013, 04:10 pm »
Denied.

You ever hear of the saying: "Don't show the whole gorilla?"  It refers to the camera techniques used in King Kong and how you don't actually see the entire beast and cope how dangerous it is until the climax of the movie.  This adds an element of mystery for the viewer, keeping them engaged and wondering more about the monster. 

You pretty much showed the whole gorilla with this review.  It covers almost everything.  I read this  and don't even feel the slightest urge to play the game because this tells me everything I'd ever need to know about the game, what I should feel, how I should handle things, etc.  You basically played the game for me through the medium of this review.

Furthermore, it is lackluster.  You tell the reader things that they would know while playing the game, big whoop.  That's what playing the game is for.  The review requires info the the player wouldn't know playing the game, opinions that other people might not necessarily feel.  Reviews don't have to be controversial, but please don't just say: "You could think you would make the jump immediately the elevator came towards you, but those spikes in the yellow area would be a nuisance, so why not jump longer?  But then the spikes in the blue area would hit you. Why not jump in between them?  Then that would mean you would jump before the elevator gets to the platform. Isn't that straight out puzzle to you?  And that’s just level 4!"  This is so matter of fact, and it takes a ton of time to read too.  Anyone who plays this game will realize this once they reach level 4.

Lastly, this review is way too segmented.  The breaks between paragraphs have no transitions of any sort, so it ends up like stop signs on the reading experience.  The reader has to skip to the next paragraph and restart from square one, losing all the flow from the previous paragraph.  There are many ways to fix this, and a lot of writers create unique styles by doing so.

Overall, this review tries to hard on things it doesn't need to and forgets the things it needs to focus on.  If I was rating this out of 100, it would get a 53/100; better than most of the trash in this category, but not nearly good enough to be reviewer quality.
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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #56 on: June 17, 2013, 04:11 pm »
I just wrote a review of a review. 

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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #57 on: June 17, 2013, 04:15 pm »
Dang.


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Re: [Application] Quadruple vision
« Reply #58 on: June 17, 2013, 04:50 pm »
With this advice, you will no doubt improve your review next time.
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