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Intro to a story I'm working on in class: (Comments? ;3)
« on: February 05, 2013, 08:44 pm »
The moon shined bright that night, a beacon of light in the overwhelming darkness, dread high in the air. The lupine wolves of the night howled, echoing their screams throughout the night, shattering the complete silence that is to be expected of these dark nights.
  ‘Twas a simple night, at  least that’s what it seemed. The blood-chilling howls, the overwhelming darkness, and the dread was all to be expected on a dark night of Thrent’s very own town of Redmont.
 However, even the most simple, normal night could change in a matter of time-distorting seconds, the moments where it seems should take hours, days even.
 It was only a matter of time before the first window shattered, the first child  screeching loud enough to impress the lupine hunters of night, and the first body to drop, impaled with a cold, cruel piece of metal that is known as a bullet.


 If y'all like it, I think I'll start posting some of the actual story XD
 

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Re: Intro to a story I'm working on in class: (Comments? ;3)
« Reply #1 on: February 05, 2013, 08:46 pm »
I like it.
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Re: Intro to a story I'm working on in class: (Comments? ;3)
« Reply #2 on: February 05, 2013, 08:46 pm »
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Re: Intro to a story I'm working on in class: (Comments? ;3)
« Reply #3 on: February 05, 2013, 08:47 pm »
Pretty good. ;)

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Re: Intro to a story I'm working on in class: (Comments? ;3)
« Reply #4 on: February 05, 2013, 08:48 pm »
Yikes. I like it. ;)
 

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Re: Intro to a story I'm working on in class: (Comments? ;3)
« Reply #5 on: February 05, 2013, 08:48 pm »

 ;3
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Re: Intro to a story I'm working on in class: (Comments? ;3)
« Reply #6 on: February 05, 2013, 10:17 pm »
I don't really like it that much. lol It doesn't make me want to read on.

 

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Re: Intro to a story I'm working on in class: (Comments? ;3)
« Reply #7 on: February 05, 2013, 10:20 pm »
That's really good. =)