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Re: Peter's Sploder Story (join for free thank; Chapter 3 released)
« Reply #30 on: October 21, 2012, 10:42 am »
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Re: Peter's Sploder Story (join for free thank; Chapter 3 released)
« Reply #31 on: October 21, 2012, 10:56 am »
No more people are allowed to pick Amer.



 

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Re: Peter's Sploder Story (join for free thank; Chapter 3 released)
« Reply #32 on: October 21, 2012, 12:09 pm »
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Re: Peter's Sploder Story (join for free thank; Chapter 3 released)
« Reply #33 on: October 21, 2012, 12:10 pm »
Bump. Peter, don't thank.

 

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Re: Peter's Sploder Story (join for free thank; Chapter 3 released)
« Reply #34 on: October 21, 2012, 04:26 pm »
Chapter 4
Location: Greylis ship
Time: Bed Time

"So this is our room, Chad, bit small, over on the left is my bed, with my only belongings other than my clothes, my laser sword. Your bed is to the right of mine. The bathroom is under that hatch in the middle of the room. It leads to the 4rth level, the bath level. There are 5 floors in this ship, we are on the 5th. Cafeteria, 3rd, Gym and staff, 2nd, and Hanger, 1st." Sharo said."I think that's all you need to know." "Thanks for the tour," Chad said. A few seconds after that, the loudspeaker in their room went on,"May Chad and Sharo please report to the 2nd floor? I repeat, may Chad and Sharo report to the second floor." "Un, oh that can't be good," Both of them said simutanously. " Jinx! Double Jinx! Triple Jinx! 1,2,3! Rock, paper, scissors!" Just then the loudspeaker went on again interrupting Chad and Sharo," Last call for Chad and Sharo. Chad and Sharo to the 2nd floor, Essence's office!" this time on each floor and eah room. "Last one there is a rotten egg," Chad said. Both boys took off.

Location: 2nd floor, Essence's office

"Boys, I'd like to say that you are both to be assigned missions. You will both be going to Hoturki to find a device left by the Sylis that will allow us to track the Sylis ship. We need to find the Sylis ship and team up against the humans. The Sylis were once good allies, we hope to regain them as allies, now you may go to Jet 23 at Port B, bring your weapons with you. Any questions?" Essence said. Sharo responded," Sir, we have never flown a ship without guidance from a coach and Chad just got here today." "Chad may be new, but when we found him, he was in a grounded jet with 100s of robots dead. We saw with our own eyes what good of a pilot he was. And as for you Sharo, you are not flying the ship, you are using the guns on it, we have seen from training that you are especially skilled with laser swords and ship mounted weapons." The Lieutenant said.

Location: Earth
Time: same time as the time the mission was assigned

"Cool battle suit!" Symph exclaimed." Now I see why Scourge wanted one of these, wish I had asked for one sooner." "Yes, that suit is made for physical strenghths and you are the strongest and fastest in our little group. It has 8 legs like a spider. the 2 front legs fire lasers and rear up, the 2 hind legs can punch a hole through 5 tons of titanium when at full power, 2 legs act as arms, an extension of us Amer's short arms(and legs), they are used like a shield or sword, whichever one, another 2 legs also shoot lasers but are behind your two "arms"." Windeh said." I am very proud of this design of mine." "Yeah, we can tell," Symph said." So when can we beat up some robots?" "We probably won't," Scourge chided in."The humans will never find us! Especially because they no that Amer hate water. They would never expect our secret base to be underwater!"



 

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Re: Peter's Sploder Story (join for free thank; Chapter 4 released)
« Reply #35 on: October 21, 2012, 04:33 pm »
Could somebody apply as a Hoturki, funny name, I know, but I need some before next chapter.



 

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Name: Tommy
Species: Greylis
Weapons: Ray Gun, Two Swords.

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Soldier: October 10, 2012
Lieutenant: March 30, 2013

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Chapter 4.5
Location: Earth
"Troop 447 to Earth." A commander said."We have located Amer."



 

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4.5 is to get you excited about chapter 5. Big battle soon.



 

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Chapter 5
Location: The Indian Ocean

The azure waters of the Indian Ocean were calm as an un-touched rock, still, un-moving, until a ripple in the surface then a shadow passed underneath, a metallic arm reached out, disrupting the calm. then cam a second, and a third, then a head."Okay, Scourge, use the energy barrier to cover me." Symph said."I know I don't go on missions very often because I am the strategist, but my suit is designed for speed, I must get the key." Symph's head dove down again a bit too late to notice the warships anchored over the Indian Ocean. Symph dove down and down. It never seemed dark because of his night vision goggles, but there was something off. The night vision goggles were not just for night vision, they could detect the smallest amount of light, and there shouldn't be much light down here, the waters were black as night with no moon. Suddenly a creature with a scaly hand grabbed his leg, as hard as a nutcracker would a nut. Symph couldn't fight back. He was too weak and Amer aren't the best swimmers. His battle suit was also made purely for speed,which wouldn't work at this depth because the suit used light to create energy. He barely had sufficient energy to keep him breathing and to keep his body tempreture normal. Another hand joined the other hand in its attempt to pull him deeper. Symph used the last of his energy to send one brain message," I've been captured, the Martians are here, I know because even though I can't see them, I can sense radiation. It shouldn't be down here."

Location: Underwater Base

"Symph's been captured!" shouted Scourge. "Let's use that tracking device we put on him." Just as she said that, the base rocked to the left and water drained in. "Energy Barrier compromised. Computers compromised. Defense System compromised. Lights compromised. Pie compromised." the base said before it sank. Windeh quickly went under the base. He donned his oxygen mask and went dove down. He was heading for the underbelly to prevent the base from sinking. He shouted," Scourge, ward off enemies!" He took out pieces of cloth and stuffed them into the leaks. "Computers, 1%," the base said. Then Windeh went to the support beams and dug his robotic legs into the support beams," I hope I don't get crushed,' he thought.

Meanwhile...

2 orange beams of energy shot past Scourge. Scourge elbowed something beside her so hard that the victim gulped down water. Then she swung one shadowblade at an energy beam. The energy beam bounced off and fried a nearby robot. She quickly did an under-water summer sault to avoid a stab from the guy she elbowed. A blue beam with 2 orange beams of energy rushed towards her. She deflected one beam with one shadowblade, dodged another, but her face slammed right into the blue energy beam. Her oxygen mask had been compromised. Her panic led to lungfuls of water. Her vision was going black as she swam towards the air pocket that Windeh had been kind enough to make. She swore," Why couldn't I get a spider suit like Windeh's?" just as she gulped down a breath of fresh air. It was like moments before she was blind and somebody had showed her the world. Suddenly, a sharp pang was felt near her left thigh. A person was chuckling softly to himself. He was, she reliezed the person she had elbowed. Scourge shot a cross bolt at the man, the blood tinged the salt-water red. Then she used her Darki revolvers to kill another jerk and quickly spun around to deflect an energy beam. She dodged another and used one Darki revolver to jam the energy cannon of a robot and the other to give the robot a faceful of death. She swung around and shot a crossbolt, killing a man who had snuck up next to her. Just then something splattered on her back. She looked at it. It was Banana pie! She gave the man who threw it an arrow to the knee. (If you don't already know, the water had drained out) Next she dodged an energy beam and returned with a shot from her revolver. It hit the robot right in the head. She shouted," Score!" Right then the robot next to the dead robot hit her with a laser. It would have meant death if Windeh hadn't blocked it with an arm. "Wait! I thought you were supporting the ship!" Scourge yelled. "Done," He smiled. A laser beam stopped the conversation. Scourge was ready however and back-flipped out of the way. She then shot a crossbow into the robot.
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Kewl.
Did you get the arrow to the knee joke and the Pie part?
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I'm dead?

 

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Chapter 6
Location: Jet

"Hello, I'm Tommy, I'm the tech specialist on your mission." A boy about Sharo and Chad's age. "We are Chad and Sharo," Sharo said."I'm Sharo. "Cool, by the way, Essence will be on Hoturki too, near our landing point. Isn't that cool!" Tommy exclaimed. "Okay," Chad said."Why?" Tommy replied," How should I know?"

Hours later...

"So this is Hoturki," Tommy said. They were in a cleared portion of land that was in a thick jungle. Vines were strewn on the ground as well as twigs and rare patches of soil. There was a tent near the landing place. The air of the place was very moist, like an ocean. However, this was a jungle. One very, very thick one. "How will we find a tracking device here?" Chad asked."It'll be finding straw in a hay stack! If we find it, it'll be like striking gold." "You are probably right, Chad." Sharo said. "So we should start right now."

Location: Mars

"What shall we do with the captured Amer?" the agent asked. "Set him free, into Hoturki. But keep track of him." Pet said. "Yes sir!" the agent said.



 

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This chapter was shorter due to weariness.



 

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Chapter 6
Location: Jet

"Hello, I'm Tommy, I'm the tech specialist on your mission." A boy about Sharo and Chad's age. "We are Chad and Sharo," Sharo said."I'm Sharo. "Cool, by the way, Essence will be on Hoturki too, near our landing point. Isn't that cool!" Tommy exclaimed. "Okay," Chad said."Why?" Tommy replied," How should I know?"

Hours later...

"So this is Hoturki," Tommy said. They were in a cleared portion of land that was in a thick jungle. Vines were strewn on the ground as well as twigs and rare patches of soil. There was a tent near the landing place. The air of the place was very moist, like an ocean. However, this was a jungle. One very, very thick one. "How will we find a tracking device here?" Chad asked."It'll be finding straw in a hay stack! If we find it, it'll be like striking gold." "You are probably right, Chad." Sharo said. "So we should start right now."

Location: Mars

"What shall we do with the captured Amer?" the agent asked. "Set him free, into Hoturki. But keep track of him." Pet said. "Yes sir!" the agent said.
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no chapter 5



 

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Chapter 7
Location: Hoturki
Time: About Midnight

Symph woke up in a rainforest and he immedietly knew something was wrong. It may have seemed like a far away dream, but he still faintly remembered nearly drowning to death. "Now, where am I?" he thought to himself. "Well I should start by building a shelter. Amer come from a desert biome, so I won't need water for some time." First, Symph gathered sticks to make a shelter, and vines to bind it. He snapped some branches off of a tree. Suddenly, something fell on him," Ouch! What was that?" he asked himself. A shadow fell over him. He slowly turned around. "Sorry?" Symph said to the giant looming ape with red fur. Symph estimated that the ape was about 6 feet tall, and it probably was 3-4 feet when it crouched. The ape growled. Symph screamed. He turned his back and ran...

right into a tree.

A vine came down and the wind blew it to make it look like it was laughing at Symph. "Wait, there can't be wind in a forest!" Symph thought. Just as the "vine" opened its mouth and bit Symph.

Location: Hoturki
Time: Breakfeast


Chad slashed through the vines," How will we find the device?" he asked. "I don't know, but we don't have to search for it like this. I could use the computers at base to find the device, a tracking device should emit radio signals I could collect with my computers." Tommy replied. "Why didn't you say this earlier?" Sharo asked. "It would have saved a lot of time." "Um.... I don't know, never occured to me I guess," Tommy said in his defense. "Now just let me return to base."

Location: Base
Time: Lunch

"It appears the device is 5 feet under the river 8 miles right of camp," Tommy said into his comlink. "Awww! We have to walk that far?" Sharo complained. "You weren't the one who had to stay at camp all day!" Tommy exclaimed. "Shut up," Chad said. "Let's go.

Location: Mars
Time: Lunch

"So, the Amer has failed our test?" Pet asked. "Yes," The agent replied. "Give him as a gift for the Greylis, I'd like to see what they will do with an Amer," Pet said. "Meanwhile, tell the public that the Amer aren't dead, I'm not about to underestimate our opponents, isn't that what always happens in stories and movies?"



 

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Chapter 8
Location: The East Redvert River
"How will we get the tracking device?" asked Chad. Sharo shrugged," Maybe we can get a big stick and attempt to scoop it out. Or maybe  we can ask somebody in the house across the river." Chad and Sharo walked over to the house across the river. All facades of the house were made of brick, wooden planks were nailed at spots where windows might have been. The house itself looked about 3 stories high. The roof was flat and the rim was lined with rusting metal that looked like it was taken out of a jail cell and super glued with another and another and so on to make a rectangle. 2 gargoyles were placed oddly, right over a trapdoor that led to the roof. Then Sharo examined the back side of the building. The back door was painted green and there was no handle or thhing to push to open the door. The green paint was flaking off and there were a few visible letters:

BACKDROP HILL #8074 HILL

Sharo wondered what it meant. He went back to the front door where Chad was waiting. Chad said," Good you're here, look," Where there should have been steps leading to the grand brass doors,which seemed to be the only thing taken care of from the outside, there was a gaping hole. "How will we get across?" Chad asked. "Also we can't go back to base, it is too far away and nearly night." Sharo said," Let's use the back door." They walked to the back door and kicked it down. Inside there was a metal wall with a device on it with all the numbers on it. A note was attached to the right of the device," You have one chance, type in one number." "What do we do?" asked Chad. "Maybe the letters on the door will help us. Hmmmm.... Backdrop Hill, that doesn't exist so maybe it is saying to the back of the hill and down." "But there are no hills on Hoturki, not many anyways, and those are far away." Sharo reminded Chad." Maybe it is saying to the left of the word hill on the door and then decrease the number. So to the left of Hill is 4 and the only number lower than that is 0!" "Let's try that," Chad said. He punched in 0 and the metal door opened up. They walked into the room. The room was huge, the walls must have been 1000 feet high and 10 feet across. An old looking device was on the left side of the room and filled the whole wall. It had a black border and a screen. To the right of the room was a counter and to the right of the counter was an entrance to what must have been the kitchen. The big room was probably a living room as there was a table in the middle and a big, black, leather couch where an old man sat. The floor was hard wood which was almost white with dust.Sharo went up to the man and asked," Who are you?" The man woke up with a startled expression. "Oh hello, I am Gargner Cyt, it has been a long time since I have woken. Who are you and how did you get here?" " We mean no harm, we were exploring and got lost, we saw your house and decided to come in through the back way because the front way had a huge sinkhole." Chad said. " I'm Chad, my friend there is Sharo." " Nice to meet you, how did you crack the code?" Gargner said. " Mr. Gargner we just followed the instructions on the door. It was quite simple actually. May we stay here tonight?" Sharo said without turning his back from the strange screen on the left wall. " What is this quaint device?" " That is a TV, short for television, it is operated by the remote beside me. It is an old form of entertainment. Let me turn it on for you. And please, call me Cyt." Cyt said as he pressed the red button on the remote, the screen flickered to life all of a sudden, color filling the screen. The TV said," KKKKKKK..." " Sorry, there is no longer a satelite on Hoturki," Cyt said." you can still watch videos, but please take a shower and feel free to help yourselves to any food in the kitchen although I doubt there is any. If there is none, go to the second room to the hallway on the left of the TV and wake my wife. She'll cook soe food for you. You both can sleep in the guest room next to my wife's." After Sharo and Chad ate their dinner they went to sleep in their new bedroom which had grey walls only, windows boarded up and a bunk bed to sleep in. " Not exactly the coziest place," Sharo mumbled as fatigue took over.