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Hmmm.
 

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Chapter 8 wasn't that good.



 

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Chapter 9
Location: Hoturki Base
"Where is Chad and Sharo? Thhould have been back a long time ago, but then again, it was very late when they had gotten to the river so they might have stayed somewhere for the night. I guess I'll have to go to the rver then," Tommy thought.

Location: River
"Maybe they went into that building," Tommy thought as he walked up to it. He walked up the steps to the front door (I do remember that the building had no steps) and banged on it. " Open up!" The door opened and revealed an empty chamber. There was nobody standing there. "Hello?" Tommy called. "Anybody home?" Tommy walked into the chamber. Suddenly the door shut revealing a dinosaur-like creature. " A Lythuir," Tommy thought. "They help the humans so this can't be good news, has the invasion on Hoturki already started?" The Lythuir raised something, a raygun, and he said," Hello, I am Sonic, but that doesn't matter because now you are my prisoner." Tommy's vision went red then slowly faded to black. He felt intense heat like a sun and then he collapsed. Surprisngly he didn't feel any pain. Tommy woke up but couldn't see or feel anything, he could still hear, but faintly. A voice said, "Hello, I see you have woken." Tommy was propped up against a pole somewher so he could stand. "Now where is Essence?" Something or somebody asked. Tommy said," I don't know," "Well let's see what you'll say after you take this," Something said. Tommy's mouth was forced open and something was poured down his throat. "Where is Essence?" The voice demanded. "5 miles north of our base," Tommy croaked. "Thank you," the voice said.



 

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Decent Chspter.  ;)
 

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Chapter 9
Location: That house
"What's on the second floor?" Chad asked. "There is something very dangerous on the second floor, that's why it is locked. I don't know the combination to the lock because I had my mind wiped to keep the information fro certain people, but I do remember that there are clues aroung the house," Gargner said. Chad rushed to Sharo and told him to begin searching the house. "Why?" Sharo asked. "Well, the house may contain clues to what is on the second floor," Chad said. That was all Chad had to say, Sharo rushed to the last room he had saw and searched it. "If I had hidden a clue here, where would I put it?" Sharo askd himself. The room was an old storage place with no boxes anymore. The room was painted gray and for some reason there was some straw strewn across the floor. Sharo could tell that there was once a light in that room, because there was a lightbulb connected to the ceiling except it appeared broken. He tried the light switch and as he expected, the light did not even flicker. Sharo took a step toward the straw and something under his feet shattered. He picked up a gray piece of glass. "How odd," he thought to himself. He lifted it up and something fell out of it. Sharo bent and picked it up.

T1-2y

"How odd," Sharo thought to himself. He left the room to go tell Chad who was searching the bathroom across from the hall. "Chad, I found something," Sharo said. "Cool, me too," Chad said. Chad took out a note. It read:

Y-H1

"Okay, what does that mean?" Sharo asked. "I was hoping you could tell me," Chad replied. Sharo then showed Chad his note. "Maybe we should just search for more," Chad said. "Well, let's take off any bedrooms because we were in two different bedrooms last night and there was no note." Sharo replied, Yeah, then that leaves the living room, the kitchen, the other storage room, and the other bathroom."

After a few hours

Sharo said to Chad," Okay, so I've foud these two notes, they don't say much,"

TT-56
H7-8

Chad said," I've only found one note."

Only one note contains the combination

"So we've gotta guess which note is the correct combination?" Sharo asked. "We could just do each combination and hope for the best," Chad replied.

After trying each combination.

"None of these are correct!" Sharo moaned. "Well, there's still one note," Chad said, holding up the last one. "You think the combination is, only one note contains the combination!" Sharo laughed. "Yep," Chad said as he punched it in. The door opened.



 

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Chapter 10
Sylas hopped off of The Winged Behemoth, one of the best ships in the Republic. His humongasaur was right behind him. "Welcome back home Ax," Sylas said to the humongasaur. The humongasaur roared in return. Sylas walked to the greeting party," Hello!" The crowd cheered in return.(well roared technically because they are Lythuic) Sylas walked into his limousine and thought," Cars are never outdated." The limousine dropped him off at a 5-star hotel called The 5-star Hotel. (complete with its own soundproof walls for discussing evil plans!)The 5-star Hotel's entrance way was magnificent. Two gold chandeliers hung from a large ceiling. There was a Persian rug on the floor, and the walls were lined with famous portraits like the Mona Lisa and Starry Night. The walls were painted with gold paint(which was probably gold) in a spacious room. The check-in place was made of a very hard material (probably some expensive alloy). Sylas walked up to it, placed his credit card on the desk, and rung the bell. An attendant immedietly rushed to him and signed him in. Then another attendant came and gave Sylas his baggage.(and Ax his baggage) Sylas tipped both the attendants $100. They gapped at the money. "Have you never seen a hundred-dollar bill in your life?" Sylas snapped," Or are you just idiots?" "S-Sorry sir," one attendant faltered. Sylas walked to the elevator and hit the button that lead to the top-most story. The top-most story wasreally a place for rich buisnessmen. It was filled with offices that were soundproof. This was where large buisness owners discussed ways to sabotage their competiters and leave them in the dust.(and usually they discussed how much candy they stole from children) Sylas walked to the end of the hallway and opened the window, then he jumped from 50-stories high. Ax followed carrying all their baggage. (By the way, humongasaurs looks like an unnaturally large bull with three horns and an armor-like covering. Humungasaurs are a favorite pet among war criminals, veterans, generals, or other people in power.)After 24 or so feet, the baggage opened up, inside was a parachute and it carried ax up to where Sylas was. He jumped onto Ax. Then Sylas pressed a button on his watch and the ground beneath them opened up. Ax wrapped his coarse tail around an iron bar as they fell into the hole. The bar jerked forward closing the ceiling(or ground) above them. Ax unwrapped his tail and they landed in the meeting room. Symph was brought before him. Sylas smiled a cruel smile, one that said," You aren't going to get out of here alive unless I say so."



 

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Am i ever gonna be in?
 

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Big battle in like 3 chapters where you versus Sharo and Chad. Well there are 2 Lythuirs helping you.



 

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Chapter 11
It was midnight on Hoturki,  everyone was asleep at the military camp besides the two guards at the entrance. They weren't expecting anything. A small company of people sneaked into the shadows of a tree next to the camp and looked at it. The camp was surrounded by a high electic fence, on the inside, they saw many tents set up with a few well-placed light poles to light the place up. The place would be easy to storm. One soldier radioed ahead," Sonic, prepare to attack," Then all the others in the group took out their rocket launchers and fired. At the same time, people on the other side fired and both groups had blasted 2 large holes in the fences. The two guars were shaken and they fumbled to hit the emergency switch. In that time the people who had no rocket launchers drew their laser pistols and blasted holes through the guards' backs and some Greylis who had woken up. Then a second wave of people rushed down, laser rifles drawn, and burned down all the tents. There was little resistence. Only 5 Greylis were actually rested enough to fight, well not including Essence. The 5 Greylis had taken out pulse grenades and then chucked them. The pulse grenades successfully knocked out the people with rocket launchers. Essence challenged 3 people with rifles to a duel and slew all of them. One person fired at Essence while the other two attempted to knock him out as he was distracted. Essence had done a black-flip and smashed the 2 peoples' heads together. Then he ripped the other guy's arm off with just his teeth. Blood, red as a rose spilled out like a fountain and coated the soil.The man screamed in agony and ran away, running smack into two people who were disarming a soldier. The soldier got up and took a rifle from one of the men and went on fighting. Essence headed over to help another Greylis who was in an intense gun fight with 3 men (and losing). Essence grabbed a rifle from a fallen soldier and fired at one attacker's shield, burning it to crisp. One man yelled something at the other and the man turned around just in time to get shot in the head. 2 people attempted to snipe at Essence, but he used his robot eye to see it and used his rifle to block the lasers. He then picked up a wood shield and rushed them. Both men were surprised and fell on the floor. Essence ripped them apart and robbed them of their pistols. He turned around to see that the other Greylis hadn't needed his help after he had disabled the other 2 men. The soldier gave a two fingered salute and went off to fight. Essence spotted another soldier who was pinned down by two men and he went to help. An unfortunate soul was running from one Greylis and bumped right into Essence. Essence gave a cold smile as if saying,"You'll regret that," before killing the man. He shoke hands with the Greylis soldier who had sent that man into such a paincked state and then went over to help the other Greylis. He was too late though and the other soldier had suicide-bombed the two soldiers and himself. The people in the first wave rushed down down from the hills to attack because their forces were dwindling. The 4 Greylis quickly finished off the surviving men in the second wave of attackers and turned to defense. The attackers reloaded their laser pistols and bombarded the brave Greylis soldiers with lasers. All the greylis were knocked out in an instance.



 

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Chapter 11.5
Sonic watched the screen of a computer intensely. "Have you found it yet?" Sylas asked impatiently. "No, now shut up, I need to concentrate,"
Sonic zoomed in on something on the virtual map. There was a small hidden ravine right there. "I've found the rebel base," Sonic declared," But first we must make a trade..."
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Chapter 12
Location: The Amer's Dome Base
A computer screen flickered to life and said, "Hello Amer, we would like to make a deal with you. We have something you want, and you have the life crystal, trade at Kansas Port at midnight." "Should we go?" Scourge asked. "Well, they didn't see me at the fight, so I may be able to surprise them and get Symph anyway," Windeh said. "Wait, how do you know they are trading Symph, how do they know where we are, and why would they think we have the life crystal!" Scourge exclaimed in one breath. "They could have seen the immense power coming from our base and assumed that we have the life crystal, they must know because of that small attack on our base, and they must be trading Symph because there is nothing else they have that we want," Windeh explained. "I see," Scourge mused under her breath," What if it is a trap?" "Well, I'll be hiding," Windeh said.
    Scourge emerged from the murky waters of the sea next to Kansas. She reloaded her Darki Revolvers and looked around. She was standing on a worn-out wooden dock wit lots of algae on it. There was a shuttle port roughly 7 feet away and a spaceship wass right there, on the gray cement of the parking lot. The Shuttle Port was a well-maintained place on the outside. Though there was lots of garbage, everything was painted and nothing looked out of place or rickety. Surrounding the Shuttle Port was a huge forest that grew ever since the downfall of humans. The spaceship parked at the lot opened up and a man got out with 6 escorts and a gigantic Triceratops+bull+beetle shell creature on a leash. The man didn't even appear slightly disturbed by it. "My name is Sylas, nice to meet you. Your friend is in the jar on Ax's back. Scourge assumed Ax was the Humongous beast, and she was right for there was a well-hidden jar on the back of it. She demanded," Let my friend go!" "Very well, but did you bring the life crystal?" Sylas smiled. He knew that they didn't have the life crystal and that there was somebody else at the port. Suddenly half of the escorts shot foam out of guns in their hands. The foam hit the water and Windeh came out of it, gasping for air. Sylas laughed," Did you really think you could trick me?" The other half of the escorts shot out nets and caught Scourge. Just then the spaceship they had come from took off. "Now you have no way out!" Sylas laughed. He took out his whips and attacked Windeh with them. Windeh was prepared however, and struck away the whips with his two lasers. Next, he used two spider legs to pin two escorts down and used four of the front legs to spray out webbing. It blinded the huge beast. Next, Windeh used his lightsaber in one spider legs hands (if you can call it that. You would prbably say feet) to disarm two more surprised escorts The other two pulled out laser rifles and fried the two spider legs pinning two escorts down, but as they were recharging, Windeh used his lasers to fry their guns, sending them running while screaming a shrill scream, very much like a hyena's laugh. The two escorts who were pinned down got up, and removed the webbing covering the huge beast's face. At the same time, Sylas took Scourge and shouted," One move and she dies!" Windeh didn't move. The two escorts took this oppening to fry another two of Windeh's spider legs. Windeh used the eject botton and launched out of the suit. It was draining too much energy. Sylas said something into his comlink and the spaceship cam eback down. He dragged the two escorts, Scourge, and his pet into the saceship. "Sayonara Sucka!" Sylas shouted into the wind. Windeh collapsed on the ground.



 

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